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SOMETHING FOR TIFF15
« on: November 21, 2013, 04:00:43 am »

 Chapter 4


 part 2

Now in the part when she is with rotor  exploring her acting ability

 And you say spent most of the afternoon with him what day is that supposed to be tomorrow what is that supposed to be yesterday what is it supposed to be a flashback memory you need to put a timing that's on there like what day and what time is happening.    Because this part is very confusing.


=============================


 Why is rotors name. In a sentence when you're talking about the  keyboard and eyes glowing. The second time his name is mentioned I understand why but the first time


=========


 Where did they get the Spy orb.     /  I don't remember reading about them picking one up in Robotropolis earlier




 Okay now there is a big button on the keypad. Are you sure you want it to be that. What about a picture of a UFO instead. And where do I put this button


 Also the problem you're talking about her being on a mission when she presses. How to be a flashback memory or you have to wwill do it. Somewhere earlier in the story


 Where is the part when Sally 9000 reads.  a bedtime story to tell



What's     lapine   ?
 You ever noticed in the show you never see her talk to herself
 It's never there I wonder if it was cut when they were making  episode

 If she's going to be talking to herself to you have to have some scenery or set for circumstances where he see this happening



 Also sonic doesn't  chuckle. back at tails. In the episode did you add this part?  For  affect.  Or are you  reading of a special script. That didn't make it to production

 That's the end of chapter 5 part 1


================


 Next chapter 5 part 2


 How can sonic grab her wheelchair wheels. 

 If someone did that to me I couldn't drive my chair

 T2 thats funny. Just think of tails of as the Fox terminator

 Should the really be bad words in the writing of sat am sonic story

 It just doesn't seem right. me after all this is not South Park

 I know people say that stuff in real life. But don't you wish they didn't

 I'm just saying




==============================

 Chapter 5 part  3


 What does is mean.   /  *****ily


 Are hover units supposed to be the things that the swat boys fly in.  ?


 In the part about the hooks hidden Hover unit.  I'm not sure if what you wrote matches up to what I saw on screen  how it was destroyed

 Yes I do need to see the episodes as I'm going through this. To  understand the setting more

 When rotor says we got to move it And he waved his arm Please mention which arm and how he moves it


 What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character

 Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ?

 Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say  wool!

 Also please note I'm not sure if I'm getting all the details right in the right spots. I'm bouncing between a notepad. / the story. And the episode on YouTube


Psudeo- Sally. ?   


 I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally.   I thought that was a nice touch .........


======&=================


 Chapter 6 part 1

 What is the stuff that she sprays in the ground called you gotta put in the name Of what it is

 Also when Sally shooting stuff. Mention the color of your energy beam that is firing

 We should have as much as visual information to The reader as possible


 Bunny doesn't look beige to me. More of a coffee brown Or mocha brown. Whichever way you want to say it


 Did you notice that when the energy beam from Power ring shootout In the show.   There's no visual indication whatsoever. Of where the energy blast gos.   That detail needs to be fixed

 Because in the cartoon it just disappears like it never happened



;__________________________________________


 Now at this point when you're talking about real Sally  Being restrained


 Above that before you start reading this It should read. 

 Meanwhile back at robotics. Lab / Or command center / hIs base of operations
 And the robot making lab

 It also should be mentioned that Sally. Turned her left eye.  Towards  Dr nicks. Screen. It looks like it's almost right behind her


********************************


 Chapter 6 part 2


 Where is tiffs / your hard drive ?


 I'm sorry it's just easier this way

 Here I'm thinking project Sally. Is happening right now with robotic turning her into a robot

 Or is it something else?


================================

 Chapter 6 part 3


 A sonic tugged. on a medal round great

 And mention something about the size of the two.


 Some of the senses are misspelled and mispronounced.  Because of my tablet.



 So.  I hope you understand what I mean

 Any questions let me know



====


 What is all this talk about smoke coming from a disconnected pipe. ?



 What's important about that pipe. ?


 Garage like door  I don't remember that in the episode

 I don't mind telling your last part chapter 6. I had to reread.  Got a little confusing when you were talking about real Sally.  And the Sally robot.    Between the parts of the robot destroy everything

 And the park Sonic and Sally being on another vew screen. Cuz there seemed 2 be. To parts to that

I think that needs. To be cleared up some more.

 As well as details about the description about how Sonic came in at  that air shaft looking tunnel. Crawl space
==================

 Notes from tails.   /

 I asked questions as I read bit by bit

 But sometimes I forget because. I m  going to all the chapters

 I t might have ch-5.   But the part when my namesake. Ant Tiffany / I think ant part part should be dropped. Because for one thing. There's no mention about how much time is passing from: b1 to b3 and she was  the outsiders

 It just doesn't seem like. My namesake would get attached to her in that way that's fast.   /  that's just how I feel about it.  / -   maybe it would happen if something bad happened to Sally or bunny.  But I could only see it happening under those terms
=======::::===================%=%
 Chapter 7


 What type of canine wasn't. That post the  wheelchair.    Couldn't we just call him a dog. ?


 I'm just trying to keep it simple for young readers. And anyone else have trouble reading the occasional word



====
 ThIs part of your namesake at this part of the story
 

She thought. smiling to her robotic legs

================================
 In the next part want to talk about Sally find tails. Is it meant to be the next day. Because the cartoon they got home at night. And it ended two moments later on that night

==================================
 In the part when it comes to bedtime story. And the real Sally supposed to be able to hear everything

 With What's going on in a knothole

 Can you please give. More explanation for how you wrote it like this why you did it. Cause it seems like a plot hole

 If this is how its gonna be. There should be some indications earlier in the story. That real Sally can here this going on

 Cuz as it is in the cartoon it seems only Robotnik can hear everything on what's going on

 I would change that
=================================
 Everything else after seems okay



























































 Chapter 4


 part 2

Now in the part when she is with rotor  exploring her acting ability

 And you say spent most of the afternoon with him what day is that supposed to be tomorrow what is that supposed to be yesterday what is it supposed to be a flashback memory you need to put a timing that's on there like what day and what time is happening.    Because this part is very confusing.


=============================


 Why is rotors name. In a sentence when you're talking about the  keyboard and eyes glowing. The second time his name is mentioned I understand why but the first time


=========


 Where did they get the Spy orb.     /  I don't remember reading about them picking one up in Robotropolis earlier




 Okay now there is a big button on the keypad. Are you sure you want it to be that. What about a picture of a UFO instead. And where do I put this button


 Also the problem you're talking about her being on a mission when she presses. How to be a flashback memory or you have to wwill do it. Somewhere earlier in the story


 Where is the part when Sally 9000 reads.  a bedtime story to tell



What's     lapine   ?
 You ever noticed in the show you never see her talk to herself
 It's never there I wonder if it was cut when they were making  episode

 If she's going to be talking to herself to you have to have some scenery or set for circumstances where he see this happening



 Also sonic doesn't  chuckle. back at tails. In the episode did you add this part?  For  affect.  Or are you  reading of a special script. That didn't make it to production

 That's the end of chapter 5 part 1


================


 Next chapter 5 part 2


 How can sonic grab her wheelchair wheels. 

 If someone did that to me I couldn't drive my chair

 T2 thats funny. Just think of tails of as the Fox terminator

 Should the really be bad words in the writing of sat am sonic story

 It just doesn't seem right. me after all this is not South Park

 I know people say that stuff in real life. But don't you wish they didn't

 I'm just saying




==============================

 Chapter 5 part  3


 What does is mean.   /  *****ily


 Are hover units supposed to be the things that the swat boys fly in.  ?


 In the part about the hooks hidden Hover unit.  I'm not sure if what you wrote matches up to what I saw on screen  how it was destroyed

 Yes I do need to see the episodes as I'm going through this. To  understand the setting more

 When rotor says we got to move it And he waved his arm Please mention which arm and how he moves it


 What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character

 Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ?

 Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say  wool!

 Also please note I'm not sure if I'm getting all the details right in the right spots. I'm bouncing between a notepad. / the story. And the episode on YouTube


Psudeo- Sally. ?   


 I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally.   I thought that was a nice touch .........


======&=================


 Chapter 6 part 1

 What is the stuff that she sprays in the ground called you gotta put in the name Of what it is

 Also when Sally shooting stuff. Mention the color of your energy beam that is firing

 We should have as much as visual information to The reader as possible


 Bunny doesn't look beige to me. More of a coffee brown Or mocha brown. Whichever way you want to say it


 Did you notice that when the energy beam from Power ring shootout In the show.   There's no visual indication whatsoever. Of where the energy blast gos.   That detail needs to be fixed

 Because in the cartoon it just disappears like it never happened



;__________________________________________


 Now at this point when you're talking about real Sally  Being restrained


 Above that before you start reading this It should read. 

 Meanwhile back at robotics. Lab / Or command center / hIs base of operations
 And the robot making lab

 It also should be mentioned that Sally. Turned her left eye.  Towards  Dr nicks. Screen. It looks like it's almost right behind her


********************************


 Chapter 6 part 2


 Where is tiffs / your hard drive ?


 I'm sorry it's just easier this way

 Here I'm thinking project Sally. Is happening right now with robotic turning her into a robot

 Or is it something else?


================================

 Chapter 6 part 3


 A sonic tugged. on a medal round great

 And mention something about the size of the two.


 Some of the senses are misspelled and mispronounced.  Because of my tablet.



 So.  I hope you understand what I mean

 Any questions let me know



====


 What is all this talk about smoke coming from a disconnected pipe. ?



 What's important about that pipe. ?


 Garage like door  I don't remember that in the episode

 I don't mind telling your last part chapter 6. I had to reread.  Got a little confusing when you were talking about real Sally.  And the Sally robot.    Between the parts of the robot destroy everything

 And the park Sonic and Sally being on another vew screen. Cuz there seemed 2 be. To parts to that

I think that needs. To be cleared up some more.

 As well as details about the description about how Sonic came in at  that air shaft looking tunnel. Crawl space
==================

 Notes from tails.   /

 I asked questions as I read bit by bit

 But sometimes I forget because. I m  going to all the chapters

 I t might have ch-5.   But the part when my namesake. Ant Tiffany / I think ant part part should be dropped. Because for one thing. There's no mention about how much time is passing from: b1 to b3 and she was  the outsiders

 It just doesn't seem like. My namesake would get attached to her in that way that's fast.   /  that's just how I feel about it.  / -   maybe it would happen if something bad happened to Sally or bunny.  But I could only see it happening under those terms
=======::::===================%=%
 Chapter 7


 What type of canine wasn't. That post the  wheelchair.    Couldn't we just call him a dog. ?


 I'm just trying to keep it simple for young readers. And anyone else have trouble reading the occasional word



====
 ThIs part of your namesake at this part of the story
 

She thought. smiling to her robotic legs

================================
 In the next part want to talk about Sally find tails. Is it meant to be the next day. Because the cartoon they got home at night. And it ended two moments later on that night

==================================
 In the part when it comes to bedtime story. And the real Sally supposed to be able to hear everything

 With What's going on in a knothole

 Can you please give. More explanation for how you wrote it like this why you did it. Cause it seems like a plot hole

 If this is how its gonna be. There should be some indications earlier in the story. That real Sally can here this going on

 Cuz as it is in the cartoon it seems only Robotnik can hear everything on what's going on

 I would change that
=================================
 Everything else after seems okay
















































































 










 Chapter 4


 part 2

Now in the part when she is with rotor  exploring her acting ability

 And you say spent most of the afternoon with him what day is that supposed to be tomorrow what is that supposed to be yesterday what is it supposed to be a flashback memory you need to put a timing that's on there like what day and what time is happening.    Because this part is very confusing.


=============================


 Why is rotors name. In a sentence when you're talking about the  keyboard and eyes glowing. The second time his name is mentioned I understand why but the first time


=========


 Where did they get the Spy orb.     /  I don't remember reading about them picking one up in Robotropolis earlier




 Okay now there is a big button on the keypad. Are you sure you want it to be that. What about a picture of a UFO instead. And where do I put this button


 Also the problem you're talking about her being on a mission when she presses. How to be a flashback memory or you have to wwill do it. Somewhere earlier in the story


 Where is the part when Sally 9000 reads.  a bedtime story to tell



What's     lapine   ?
 You ever noticed in the show you never see her talk to herself
 It's never there I wonder if it was cut when they were making  episode

 If she's going to be talking to herself to you have to have some scenery or set for circumstances where he see this happening



 Also sonic doesn't  chuckle. back at tails. In the episode did you add this part?  For  affect.  Or are you  reading of a special script. That didn't make it to production

 That's the end of chapter 5 part 1


================


 Next chapter 5 part 2


 How can sonic grab her wheelchair wheels. 

 If someone did that to me I couldn't drive my chair

 T2 thats funny. Just think of tails of as the Fox terminator

 Should the really be bad words in the writing of sat am sonic story

 It just doesn't seem right. me after all this is not South Park

 I know people say that stuff in real life. But don't you wish they didn't

 I'm just saying




==============================

 Chapter 5 part  3


 What does is mean.   /  *****ily


 Are hover units supposed to be the things that the swat boys fly in.  ?


 In the part about the hooks hidden Hover unit.  I'm not sure if what you wrote matches up to what I saw on screen  how it was destroyed

 Yes I do need to see the episodes as I'm going through this. To  understand the setting more

 When rotor says we got to move it And he waved his arm Please mention which arm and how he moves it


 What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character

 Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ?

 Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say  wool!

 Also please note I'm not sure if I'm getting all the details right in the right spots. I'm bouncing between a notepad. / the story. And the episode on YouTube


Psudeo- Sally. ?   


 I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally.   I thought that was a nice touch .........


======&=================


 Chapter 6 part 1

 What is the stuff that she sprays in the ground called you gotta put in the name Of what it is

 Also when Sally shooting stuff. Mention the color of your energy beam that is firing

 We should have as much as visual information to The reader as possible


 Bunny doesn't look beige to me. More of a coffee brown Or mocha brown. Whichever way you want to say it


 Did you notice that when the energy beam from Power ring shootout In the show.   There's no visual indication whatsoever. Of where the energy blast gos.   That detail needs to be fixed

 Because in the cartoon it just disappears like it never happened



;__________________________________________


 Now at this point when you're talking about real Sally  Being restrained


 Above that before you start reading this It should read. 

 Meanwhile back at robotics. Lab / Or command center / hIs base of operations
 And the robot making lab

 It also should be mentioned that Sally. Turned her left eye.  Towards  Dr nicks. Screen. It looks like it's almost right behind her


********************************


 Chapter 6 part 2


 Where is tiffs / your hard drive ?


 I'm sorry it's just easier this way

 Here I'm thinking project Sally. Is happening right now with robotic turning her into a robot

 Or is it something else?


================================

 Chapter 6 part 3


 A sonic tugged. on a medal round great

 And mention something about the size of the two.


 Some of the senses are misspelled and mispronounced.  Because of my tablet.



 So.  I hope you understand what I mean

 Any questions let me know



====


 What is all this talk about smoke coming from a disconnected pipe. ?



 What's important about that pipe. ?


 Garage like door  I don't remember that in the episode

 I don't mind telling your last part chapter 6. I had to reread.  Got a little confusing when you were talking about real Sally.  And the Sally robot.    Between the parts of the robot destroy everything

 And the park Sonic and Sally being on another vew screen. Cuz there seemed 2 be. To parts to that

I think that needs. To be cleared up some more.

 As well as details about the description about how Sonic came in at  that air shaft looking tunnel. Crawl space
==================

 Notes from tails.   /

 I asked questions as I read bit by bit

 But sometimes I forget because. I m  going to all the chapters

 I t might have ch-5.   But the part when my namesake. Ant Tiffany / I think ant part part should be dropped. Because for one thing. There's no mention about how much time is passing from: b1 to b3 and she was  the outsiders

 It just doesn't seem like. My namesake would get attached to her in that way that's fast.   /  that's just how I feel about it.  / -   maybe it would happen if something bad happened to Sally or bunny.  But I could only see it happening under those terms
=======::::===================%=%
 Chapter 7


 What type of canine wasn't. That post the  wheelchair.    Couldn't we just call him a dog. ?


 I'm just trying to keep it simple for young readers. And anyone else have trouble reading the occasional word



====
 ThIs part of your namesake at this part of the story
 

She thought. smiling to her robotic legs

================================
 In the next part want to talk about Sally find tails. Is it meant to be the next day. Because the cartoon they got home at night. And it ended two moments later on that night

==================================
 In the part when it comes to bedtime story. And the real Sally supposed to be able to hear everything

 With What's going on in a knothole

 Can you please give. More explanation for how you wrote it like this why you did it. Cause it seems like a plot hole

 If this is how its gonna be. There should be some indications earlier in the story. That real Sally can here this going on

 Cuz as it is in the cartoon it seems only Robotnik can hear everything on what's going on

 I would change that
=================================
 Everything else after seems okay
















































































 











 I found this on my tablet after a very long time I don't remember if I sent it to you already / so just in case here you are


 Chapter 4


 part 2

Now in the part when she is with rotor  exploring her acting ability

 And you say spent most of the afternoon with him what day is that supposed to be tomorrow what is that supposed to be yesterday what is it supposed to be a flashback memory you need to put a timing that's on there like what day and what time is happening.    Because this part is very confusing.


=============================


 Why is rotors name. In a sentence when you're talking about the  keyboard and eyes glowing. The second time his name is mentioned I understand why but the first time


=========


 Where did they get the Spy orb.     /  I don't remember reading about them picking one up in Robotropolis earlier




 Okay now there is a big button on the keypad. Are you sure you want it to be that. What about a picture of a UFO instead. And where do I put this button


 Also the problem you're talking about her being on a mission when she presses. How to be a flashback memory or you have to wwill do it. Somewhere earlier in the story


 Where is the part when Sally 9000 reads.  a bedtime story to tell



What's     lapine   ?
 You ever noticed in the show you never see her talk to herself
 It's never there I wonder if it was cut when they were making  episode

 If she's going to be talking to herself to you have to have some scenery or set for circumstances where he see this happening



 Also sonic doesn't  chuckle. back at tails. In the episode did you add this part?  For  affect.  Or are you  reading of a special script. That didn't make it to production

 That's the end of chapter 5 part 1


================


 Next chapter 5 part 2


 How can sonic grab her wheelchair wheels. 

 If someone did that to me I couldn't drive my chair

 T2 thats funny. Just think of tails of as the Fox terminator

 Should the really be bad words in the writing of sat am sonic story

 It just doesn't seem right. me after all this is not South Park

 I know people say that stuff in real life. But don't you wish they didn't

 I'm just saying




==============================

 Chapter 5 part  3


 What does is mean.   /  *****ily


 Are hover units supposed to be the things that the swat boys fly in.  ?


 In the part about the hooks hidden Hover unit.  I'm not sure if what you wrote matches up to what I saw on screen  how it was destroyed

 Yes I do need to see the episodes as I'm going through this. To  understand the setting more

 When rotor says we got to move it And he waved his arm Please mention which arm and how he moves it


 What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character

 Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ?

 Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say  wool!

 Also please note I'm not sure if I'm getting all the details right in the right spots. I'm bouncing between a notepad. / the story. And the episode on YouTube


Psudeo- Sally. ?   


 I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally.   I thought that was a nice touch .........


======&=================


 Chapter 6 part 1

 What is the stuff that she sprays in the ground called you gotta put in the name Of what it is

 Also when Sally shooting stuff. Mention the color of your energy beam that is firing

 We should have as much as visual information to The reader as possible


 Bunny doesn't look beige to me. More of a coffee brown Or mocha brown. Whichever way you want to say it


 Did you notice that when the energy beam from Power ring shootout In the show.   There's no visual indication whatsoever. Of where the energy blast gos.   That detail needs to be fixed

 Because in the cartoon it just disappears like it never happened



;__________________________________________


 Now at this point when you're talking about real Sally  Being restrained


 Above that before you start reading this It should read. 

 Meanwhile back at robotics. Lab / Or command center / hIs base of operations
 And the robot making lab

 It also should be mentioned that Sally. Turned her left eye.  Towards  Dr nicks. Screen. It looks like it's almost right behind her


********************************


 Chapter 6 part 2


 Where is tiffs / your hard drive ?


 I'm sorry it's just easier this way

 Here I'm thinking project Sally. Is happening right now with robotic turning her into a robot

 Or is it something else?


================================

 Chapter 6 part 3


 A sonic tugged. on a medal round great

 And mention something about the size of the two.


 Some of the senses are misspelled and mispronounced.  Because of my tablet.



 So.  I hope you understand what I mean

 Any questions let me know



====


 What is all this talk about smoke coming from a disconnected pipe. ?



 What's important about that pipe. ?


 Garage like door  I don't remember that in the episode

 I don't mind telling your last part chapter 6. I had to reread.  Got a little confusing when you were talking about real Sally.  And the Sally robot.    Between the parts of the robot destroy everything

 And the park Sonic and Sally being on another vew screen. Cuz there seemed 2 be. To parts to that

I think that needs. To be cleared up some more.

 As well as details about the description about how Sonic came in at  that air shaft looking tunnel. Crawl space
==================

 Notes from tails.   /

 I asked questions as I read bit by bit

 But sometimes I forget because. I m  going to all the chapters

 I t might have ch-5.   But the part when my namesake. Ant Tiffany / I think ant part part should be dropped. Because for one thing. There's no mention about how much time is passing from: b1 to b3 and she was  the outsiders

 It just doesn't seem like. My namesake would get attached to her in that way that's fast.   /  that's just how I feel about it.  / -   maybe it would happen if something bad happened to Sally or bunny.  But I could only see it happening under those terms
=======::::===================%=%
 Chapter 7


 What type of canine wasn't. That post the  wheelchair.    Couldn't we just call him a dog. ?


 I'm just trying to keep it simple for young readers. And anyone else have trouble reading the occasional word



====
 ThIs part of your namesake at this part of the story
 

She thought. smiling to her robotic legs

================================
 In the next part want to talk about Sally find tails. Is it meant to be the next day. Because the cartoon they got home at night. And it ended two moments later on that night

==================================
 In the part when it comes to bedtime story. And the real Sally supposed to be able to hear everything

 With What's going on in a knothole

 Can you please give. More explanation for how you wrote it like this why you did it. Cause it seems like a plot hole

 If this is how its gonna be. There should be some indications earlier in the story. That real Sally can here this going on

 Cuz as it is in the cartoon it seems only Robotnik can hear everything on what's going on

 I would change that
=================================
 Everything else after seems okay
















































































 













 




























 














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Re: SOMETHING FOR TIFF15
« Reply #1 on: November 21, 2013, 04:03:28 am »
I think this was for book 3 but I'm not sure you'll have to let me know well in any case at least it's here and it's safe

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Re: SOMETHING FOR TIFF15
« Reply #2 on: July 02, 2014, 09:16:33 pm »
SORRY ABOUT WAITING SO LONG TO REPLY, TAILS. LIFE HAS BEEN CRAZILY HECTIC LATELY. I'LL DO MY BEST TO REPLY AS CLEARLY AS I CAN.


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Chapter 4


 part 2

Now in the part when she is with rotor  exploring her acting ability

 And you say spent most of the afternoon with him what day is that supposed to be tomorrow what is that supposed to be yesterday what is it supposed to be a flashback memory you need to put a timing that's on there like what day and what time is happening.    Because this part is very confusing.

'ACTING'? YOU MEAN 'HACKING' DONT YOU? ANYWAYS, SORRY FOR CONFUSING YOU. ITS LATE IN THE AFTERNOON, AROUND 3:30 TO 6:00.

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 Why is rotors name. In a sentence when you're talking about the  keyboard and eyes glowing. The second time his name is mentioned I understand why but the first time


OKAY, I SEE THE SENTENCE IN QUESTION

'tristina frowned, then looked at Rotor wearily as Rotor pushed his muzzle further down his tusks.'

SORRY ABOUT THAT. I DIDNT EVEN NOTICE ROTOR'S NAME WAS MENTIONED TWICE. HOW ABOUT I CHANGE THE SECOND 'ROTOR' TO 'THE WALRUS' OR 'HE'?
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 Where did they get the Spy orb.     /  I don't remember reading about them picking one up in Robotropolis earlier

I THOUGHT I EXPLAINED THAT.  SORRY. ROTOR HAD A DISABLED SPY ORB LYING AROUND AND DECIDED TO USE IT TO TEST TRISTINA'S HACKING ABILITY.

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Okay now there is a big button on the keypad. Are you sure you want it to be that. What about a picture of a UFO instead. And where do I put this button

ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT THIS LINE?

'"Okay bolt bottoms," Tristina snarled, glancing briefly to her right wheelchair arm. "THIS is where we part company!" Tristina cried, jamming all of her fingers on a button with a ring etched into it. a whitish golden glow engulfed the hedgehog as a burst of power exploded from the back of her wheelchair. Tristina then whooped as she left the robots in the dust.'

THATS THE TURBO BOOST BUTTON. I THINK WE ALREADY HAVE A DRAWING OF THAT.

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Also the problem you're talking about her being on a mission when she presses. How to be a flashback memory or you have to wwill do it. Somewhere earlier in the story

I'M AFRAID I DONT UNDERSTAND WHAT YOUR ASKING. WHAT FLASHBACK?

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Where is the part when Sally 9000 reads.  a bedtime story to tell

ITS NEAR THE END. I FORGOT TO PUT IT IN, SO I HAD SALLY HAVE A 'FLASHBACK' TO WHEN SHE HEARD THE ROBOT SALLY 'READING' TO TAILS

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What's     lapine   ?
LAPINE IS ANOTHER WORD FOR RABBIT.


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You ever noticed in the show you never see her talk to herself
 It's never there I wonder if it was cut when they were making  episode

 If she's going to be talking to herself to you have to have some scenery or set for circumstances where he see this happening

I THINK THATS THE SCENE WHERE TAILS SEE'S SALLY SIGH, THEN SCAN THE HUTS. I KNOW A SIGH ISNT THE SAME AS TALKING, BUT IT SEEMS IN CHARACTER TO ME.


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Also sonic doesn't  chuckle. back at tails. In the episode did you add this part?  For  affect.  Or are you  reading of a special script. That didn't make it to production

WHERE EXACTLY DID YOU READ THIS PART.



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That's the end of chapter 5 part 1



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 Next chapter 5 part 2


 How can sonic grab her wheelchair wheels.


SONIC DIDNT. TRISTINA GRABBED HER OWN WHEELCHAIR WHEELS.


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If someone did that to me I couldn't drive my chair

 T2 thats funny. Just think of tails of as the Fox terminator

HEH. I'M GOING TO HAVE TO MAKE A DRAWING OF THAT SOME TIME. SORT OF LIKE THE TAILS DOLL? EWW, THAT WOULD BE CREEPY.


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Should the really be bad words in the writing of sat am sonic story

 It just doesn't seem right. me after all this is not South Park

 I know people say that stuff in real life. But don't you wish they didn't

 I'm just saying



I DONT RECALL WRITING ANY CURSING. WHERE DID YOU READ THIS?
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 Chapter 5 part  3


 What does is mean.   /  *****ily

AH YES. FOUND AND CHANGED TO 'JOKINGLY'
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Are hover units supposed to be the things that the swat boys fly in.  ?

YES. THEY ARE ALSO KNOWN AS 'HOVER CRAFTS' IN THE SERIES.


 
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In the part about the hooks hidden Hover unit.  I'm not sure if what you wrote matches up to what I saw on screen  how it was destroyed

IS THIS THE SCENE YOU WERE TALKING ABOUT?

'the four grappling hooks then sank onto the lower part of the hovercraft and split it horizontally. the bottom half crashed into the the concrete ground while the upper half arched like a arrow into a nearby building.'



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Yes I do need to see the episodes as I'm going through this. To  understand the setting more

 When rotor says we got to move it And he waved his arm Please mention which arm and how he moves it



HE MOVES HIS ARM AS IF HE'S THROWING A BASEBALL.

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What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character

WHEN WAS THIS?

 Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ?
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Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say  wool!

I GUESS I FORGOT TO ADD THAT PART. SORRY.


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Also please note I'm not sure if I'm getting all the details right in the right spots. I'm bouncing between a notepad. / the story. And the episode on YouTube


Pseudo- Sally. ?   

THATS FINE. IM BOUNCING BETWEEN THE STORY AND THIS POST, SO ITS COOL.

PSEUDO IS ANOTHER WORD FOR 'FAKE'.


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I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally.   I thought that was a nice touch .........

THANKS. I'VE SEEN IT DONE IN OTHER FAN FICTIONS, SO I THOUGHT I WOULD TRY IT MYSELF. GLAD TO SEE IT WORKED.


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 Chapter 6 part 1

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What is the stuff that she sprays in the ground called you gotta put in the name Of what it is

I DID.

Skidding into a abandoned parking garage, Sally pointed her right finger at the floor and sprayed out a familiar lumpy dark green sludge on the ground. The second she was finished, Sally raced behind a abandoned non functioning heater. Seconds later, Sonic came into the garage in persuit of the robot. "Woah!" Sonic cried as the dark green sludge clung to his red and white sneakers, holding him fast to the ground. grunting, Sonic lifted his shoe as long strings of the lumpy dark green slime clung to his shoes.

"Mega Muck!" Sonic declaired, continuing to struggle in the lumpy dark green goo

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Also when Sally shooting stuff. Mention the color of your energy beam that is firing

AGAIN, I DID:


'Sally' pointed her laser finger at a dull gray brick wall as she ran. a blue laser leapt from her finger
and struck the wall, blasting it apart like rubble.

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We should have as much as visual information to The reader as possible


 Bunny doesn't look beige to me. More of a coffee brown Or mocha brown. Whichever way you want to say it

TOO. MANY. VARIATIONS. OF BROWN. HEH, JUST KIDDING. I UNDERSTAND.
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Did you notice that when the energy beam from Power ring shootout In the show.   There's no visual indication whatsoever. Of where the energy blast gos.   That detail needs to be fixed

 Because in the cartoon it just disappears like it never happened

I THOUGHT I DID FIX THAT.

'Sally fired her laser finger at him again, but Sonic merely pulled out his power ring. leveling it infront of him, Sonic beared his teeth as the power ring glowed.

Finally, the ring sent out a beam of yellow energy that barely missed Sally. Also infused with energy from the power ring, Sonic surged forward and began to run circles around the robot.'

;__________________________________________


 Now at this point when you're talking about real Sally  Being restrained


 Above that before you start reading this It should read.

 
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Meanwhile back at robotics. Lab / Or command center / hIs base of operations
 And the robot making lab

 It also should be mentioned that Sally. Turned her left eye.  Towards  Dr nicks. Screen. It looks like it's almost right behind her

I REALLY DONT SEE A PLACE TO MENTION THIS. I'LL KEEP WORKING ON IT THOUGH.


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 Chapter 6 part 2


 Where is tiffs / your hard drive ?


 I'm sorry it's just easier this way
TIFF WAS TALKING ABOUT THE ROBOT SALLY'S HARD DRIVE, NOT HER OWN. TIFF DOESNT HAVE A HARD DRIVE.

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Here I'm thinking project Sally. Is happening right now with robotic turning her into a robot

 Or is it something else?

'PROJECT SALLY' IS ROBOTNIKS PLAN TO SWITCH SALLY WITH THE FAKE AND USE THE FAKE SALLY TO REVEAL KNOTHOLE.


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 Chapter 6 part 3


 A sonic tugged. on a medal round great

 And mention something about the size of the two.


MAYBE LATER. REALLY TIRED AT THE MOMENT, SORRY.

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Some of the senses are misspelled and mispronounced.  Because of my tablet.



 So.  I hope you understand what I mean


'SENSES'? YOU MEAN SENTENCES?

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Any questions let me know


NOT A PROBLEM.
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What is all this talk about smoke coming from a disconnected pipe. ?



 What's important about that pipe. ?
THE DISCONNECTED PIPE IS ETHIER AN EXAUST PIPE OR SOMETHING THAT HOLDS STEAM.

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Garage like door  I don't remember that in the episode
THE SCENE WHERE SONIC AND SALLY EXIT ROBOTNIKS HEADQUARTERS. THE DOOR LOOKS LIKE A GARAGE DOOR.


 OKAY, IM GOING TO HAVE TO LEAVE OFF HERE FOR TONIGHT. I'M TOO TIRED TO CONTINUE. I'LL TRY TO ANSWER  MORE QUESTIONS TOMORROW.
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Re: SOMETHING FOR TIFF15
« Reply #3 on: July 06, 2014, 02:26:49 am »
OK ON PC NOW NOW TABLET
LOOK OVER WHAT U ADDED WHAT IN W7 NOTEPAD

THEN POST TO U

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1. YA HACKING MY TABLET BUG ON WRITING AND IF I TRY 2 FIX POST I LOSE EVERYTHING

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2. THAT HARD PICK
USE - THE 1ST ONE IN CASE SOME READER DONT NO WHAT HE IS / JUST HOPE IT DOESNT SOUND RACEY LIKE A SLER

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3. ORB IF WHAT U TELL ME IS NOT THERE IN RITE SPOT PLEASE ADD IT

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OVER THE PASSING OF THE YEAR I DONT REALLY REMEMBER TO MUCH
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4 DONT REMEBER IF THATS THE LINE I TALK ABOUT OR NOT TO MUCH TIME PAS TO NO

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4 A / THE RING BUTTON YA WE GOT ART OF IT

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5 ON FLASH BACK IF THAT WAS WHAT I ASKING ABOUT DONT REMEMBER

NEXT ILL COPY PART IM ASKING ABOUT WISH I DIS IT B4
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6. O SO THAT Y BEDTIME STORY AT END U FORGOT THAT OK IF LIKE CAN FIX IT OR KEEP AS IS UR PICK

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7 1ST READ THAT 1ST HERD LAPINE  I WONDER WHERE IT CAME FROM 
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8. OK JUST WANTED 2 ADD MORE DETELL TO IT IS ALL / SALLY TALKING TO HERSELF

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9 DONT REMEBER ABOUT SONIC PART IN STORY I MUST HAVE SEEN IT JUST DONT NO WHAT STORY PART
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10. WHEELCHAIR WHEELS GRABING MAYBE SAW SOMETHING U ADDED BY MISTAKE IN MY LAST FULL READ / DONT NO

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11. GOODNESS NO NOT LIKE TAILS DOLL AT ALL

MY VERSON OF T2 FOX FORM HE.D  BE JUST HAVING  THAT JACKET AND GLASSES ON LIKE AT START OF T2 MOVE
GLASSES OVER EYES  / JACKET OPEN DOWN MIDEL ALL THE WAY
NO SHERT JUST FURY LIKE HE IS
LOVE 2 C A PIC THIS WAY
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12 ON BAD WORD I DONT RECALL SORRY

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JOKINGLY DONT MEENING OF IT NOW BUT OK I MEEEN THAT IF ITS REAL WORD
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14 O 'HOVER CRAFTS'  OK 8)

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15 HOOK PART / YA THINK THAT THE PART

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16 A / OK HOPING ARMDETELL IS ADDED IN STORY

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16 B


What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character




WHEN WAS THIS?


SADLY DONT NO TO MUCH TIME PASS

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I WISH I DID


Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ? I THINK SO


 

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Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say  wool!




I GUESS I FORGOT TO ADD THAT PART. SORRY.

TAILS - WELL U CAN GO BACK AND ADD IT IN

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WHAT LAND DOES - PSEUDO - COME FROM WHAT IANGUAAGE ?

1 OTHER WORD FOR PSEUDO WOOD BE 
POSER

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19 I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally.   I thought that was a nice touch .........




THANKS. I'VE SEEN IT DONE IN OTHER FAN FICTIONS, SO I THOUGHT I WOULD TRY IT MYSELF. GLAD TO SEE IT WORKED. IT WORKED , WORKED WELL

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20 Above that before you start reading this It should read.

 

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Meanwhile back at robotics. Lab / Or command center / hIs base of operations
 And the robot making lab

 It also should be mentioned that Sally. Turned her left eye.  Towards  Dr nicks. Screen. It looks like it's almost right behind her



I REALLY DONT SEE A PLACE TO MENTION THIS. I'LL KEEP WORKING ON IT THOUGH.



TAILS OK I HOPE U CAN

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 Chapter 6 part 2


 Where is tiffs / your hard drive ?


 I'm sorry it's just easier this way


 TIFF WAS TALKING ABOUT THE ROBOT SALLY'S HARD DRIVE, NOT HER OWN. TIFF DOESNT HAVE A HARD DRIVE.

TAILS NOT SURE Y I READ IT THAT WAY THEN

MAYBE THAT POINT NEEDS 2-B MADE MORE CLEAR IN THAT PART OF THE STORY / JUST SAYING IS ALL


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22 OK I I C NOW ABOUT PROJECT SALLY

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 Chapter 6 part 3


 A sonic tugged. on a medal round great

 And mention something about the size of the two.





MAYBE LATER. REALLY TIRED AT THE MOMENT, SORRY.

TAILS > WELL HOPE IT BE ADD AT SOME POINT

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'SENSES'? YOU MEAN SENTENCES?

25TAILS - THAT WHAY I MENT BAD TABLET

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26 MAY IT SHOULD BE CAL STEAM PIP

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27

Garage like door  I don't remember that in the episode


THE SCENE WHERE SONIC AND SALLY EXIT ROBOTNIKS HEADQUARTERS. THE DOOR LOOKS LIKE A GARAGE DOOR.


TAILS - OK IT BEEN LIKE HALF A YEAR SESE I SAW N E SATAM EP-S SO ALOT I DOMT REMEMBER

I HOPE UNDERSTAND MY ANSWER STARTED THIS A DAY AGO
I THINK IM DONE NOW N E MORE LET ME NO

























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Re: SOMETHING FOR TIFF15
« Reply #4 on: July 10, 2014, 01:09:06 pm »
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Chapter 4
part 2

Now in the part when she is with rotor  exploring her acting ability
And you say spent most of the afternoon with him what day is that supposed to be tomorrow what is that supposed to be yesterday what is it supposed to be a flashback memory you need to put a timing that's on there like what day and what time is happening.    Because this part is very confusing.

'ACTING'? YOU MEAN 'HACKING' DONT YOU? ANYWAYS, SORRY FOR CONFUSING YOU. ITS LATE IN THE AFTERNOON, AROUND 3:30 TO 6:00.

1. YA HACKING MY TABLET BUG ON WRITING AND IF I TRY 2 FIX POST I LOSE EVERYTHING

EEEP, THAT SUCKS! ANYAYS, I UNDERSTAND WHAT YOUR SAYING NOW. OKAY, I UNDERSTAND. HOW OLD IS YOUR TABLET, IT SOUNDS LIKE YOU NEED TO GET A NEW ONE.


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     Why is rotors name. In a sentence when you're talking about the  keyboard and eyes glowing. The second time his name is mentioned I understand why but the first time

OKAY, I SEE THE SENTENCE IN QUESTION

'tristina frowned, then looked at Rotor wearily as Rotor pushed his muzzle further down his tusks.'

SORRY ABOUT THAT. I DIDNT EVEN NOTICE ROTOR'S NAME WAS MENTIONED TWICE. HOW ABOUT I CHANGE THE SECOND 'ROTOR' TO 'THE WALRUS' OR 'HE'?
2. THAT HARD PICK
USE - THE 1ST ONE IN CASE SOME READER DONT NO WHAT HE IS / JUST HOPE IT DOESNT SOUND RACEY LIKE A SLER

OKAY. I THINK IVE FIXED IT, BUT ILL HAVE TO CHECK ON IT TO MAKE SURE.


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     Where did they get the Spy orb.     /  I don't remember reading about them picking one up in Robotropolis earlier

I THOUGHT I EXPLAINED THAT.  SORRY. ROTOR HAD A DISABLED SPY ORB LYING AROUND AND DECIDED TO USE IT TO TEST TRISTINA'S HACKING ABILITY.

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3. ORB IF WHAT U TELL ME IS NOT THERE IN RITE SPOT PLEASE ADD IT

OKAY. ILL CHECK IT AND FIX IT LATER.


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     Okay now there is a big button on the keypad. Are you sure you want it to be that. What about a picture of a UFO instead. And where do I put this button

ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT THIS LINE?

'"Okay bolt bottoms," Tristina snarled, glancing briefly to her right wheelchair arm. "THIS is where we part company!" Tristina cried, jamming all of her fingers on a button with a ring etched into it. a whitish golden glow engulfed the hedgehog as a burst of power exploded from the back of her wheelchair. Tristina then whooped as she left the robots in the dust.'

THATS THE TURBO BOOST BUTTON. I THINK WE ALREADY HAVE A DRAWING OF THAT.
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OVER THE PASSING OF THE YEAR I DONT REALLY REMEMBER TO MUCH
 DONT REMEBER IF THATS THE LINE I TALK ABOUT OR NOT TO MUCH TIME PAS TO NO
 A / THE RING BUTTON YA WE GOT ART OF IT

THATS FINE. IT HAS BEEN A LONG TIME, HASNT IT?


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     Also the problem you're talking about her being on a mission when she presses. How to be a flashback memory or you have to wwill do it. Somewhere earlier in the story

I'M AFRAID I DONT UNDERSTAND WHAT YOUR ASKING. WHAT FLASHBACK?
5 ON FLASH BACK IF THAT WAS WHAT I ASKING ABOUT DONT REMEMBER

NEXT ILL COPY PART IM ASKING ABOUT WISH I DIS IT B4

THATS FINE.


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     Where is the part when Sally 9000 reads.  a bedtime story to tell


ITS NEAR THE END. I FORGOT TO PUT IT IN, SO I HAD SALLY HAVE A 'FLASHBACK' TO WHEN SHE HEARD THE ROBOT SALLY 'READING' TO TAILS

6. O SO THAT Y BEDTIME STORY AT END U FORGOT THAT OK IF LIKE CAN FIX IT OR KEEP AS IS UR PICK

I THINK I'LL KEEP IT AS IS.


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    What's     lapine   ?

LAPINE IS ANOTHER WORD FOR RABBIT.
7 1ST READ THAT 1ST HERD LAPINE  I WONDER WHERE IT CAME FROM 
TO KEEP THE EXPLAINATION SIMPLE, I'LL JUST SAY THAT 'LAPINE' IS LATIN FOR 'RABBIT'


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     You ever noticed in the show you never see her talk to herself
     It's never there I wonder if it was cut when they were making  episode

     If she's going to be talking to herself to you have to have some scenery or set for circumstances where he see this happening


I THINK THATS THE SCENE WHERE TAILS SEE'S SALLY SIGH, THEN SCAN THE HUTS. I KNOW A SIGH ISNT THE SAME AS TALKING, BUT IT SEEMS IN CHARACTER TO ME.
8. OK JUST WANTED 2 ADD MORE DETELL TO IT IS ALL / SALLY TALKING TO HERSELF

THATS FINE. SINCE TAILS WAS THE ONLY WITNESS, 'TALKING TO HERSELF' IS PROBABLY THE SAME AS SIGHING IN TAILS WORLD.


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     Also sonic doesn't  chuckle. back at tails. In the episode did you add this part?  For  affect.  Or are you  reading of a special script. That didn't make it to production


WHERE EXACTLY DID YOU READ THIS PART.

9 DONT REMEBER ABOUT SONIC PART IN STORY I MUST HAVE SEEN IT JUST DONT NO WHAT STORY PART

THATS FINE, DONT WORRY ABOUT IT.


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     That's the end of chapter 5 part 1



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     Next chapter 5 part 2


     How can sonic grab her wheelchair wheels.



SONIC DIDNT. TRISTINA GRABBED HER OWN WHEELCHAIR WHEELS.

10. WHEELCHAIR WHEELS GRABING MAYBE SAW SOMETHING U ADDED BY MISTAKE IN MY LAST FULL READ / DONT NO

THATS OKAY. DONT WORRY ABOUT IT.
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     If someone did that to me I couldn't drive my chair

     T2 thats funny. Just think of tails of as the Fox terminator


HEH. I'M GOING TO HAVE TO MAKE A DRAWING OF THAT SOME TIME. SORT OF LIKE THE TAILS DOLL? EWW, THAT WOULD BE CREEPY.
11. GOODNESS NO NOT LIKE TAILS DOLL AT ALL

MY VERSON OF T2 FOX FORM HE.D  BE JUST HAVING  THAT JACKET AND GLASSES ON LIKE AT START OF T2 MOVE
GLASSES OVER EYES  / JACKET OPEN DOWN MIDEL ALL THE WAY
NO SHERT JUST FURY LIKE HE IS
LOVE 2 C A PIC THIS WAY

AH, OKAY. I THINK IVE SEEN A VERSION OF TAILS IN A FAN GAME CALLED 'SONIC EPOCH'.

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     Should the really be bad words in the writing of sat am sonic story
     It just doesn't seem right. me after all this is not South Park
     I know people say that stuff in real life. But don't you wish they didn't
     I'm just saying

I DONT RECALL WRITING ANY CURSING. WHERE DID YOU READ THIS?

12 ON BAD WORD I DONT RECALL SORRY
THATS FINE.


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    Chapter 5 part  3


     What does is mean.   /  *****ily

AH YES. FOUND AND CHANGED TO 'JOKINGLY'
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JOKINGLY DONT MEENING OF IT NOW BUT OK I MEEEN THAT IF ITS REAL WORD

I THINK IT IS. SONIC IS BASICLY SAYING THE LINE IN A JOKE LIKE MANNER.


   
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Are hover units supposed to be the things that the swat boys fly in.  ?


YES. THEY ARE ALSO KNOWN AS 'HOVER CRAFTS' IN THE SERIES.
14 O 'HOVER CRAFTS'  OK

GLAD TO HEAR THATS SETTLED.


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In the part about the hooks hidden Hover unit.  I'm not sure if what you wrote matches up to what I saw on screen  how it was destroyed

IS THIS THE SCENE YOU WERE TALKING ABOUT?

'the four grappling hooks then sank onto the lower part of the hovercraft and split it horizontally. the bottom half crashed into the the concrete ground while the upper half arched like a arrow into a nearby building.'

15 HOOK PART / YA THINK THAT THE PART

I WAS ACTUALLY IMAGINING THAT SCENE WHEN I WROTE ABOUT THE GRAPPLING HOOKS. I HOPE IT MATCHES UP.

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     Yes I do need to see the episodes as I'm going through this. To  understand the setting more

     When rotor says we got to move it And he waved his arm Please mention which arm and how he moves it



HE MOVES HIS ARM AS IF HE'S THROWING A BASEBALL.
A / OK HOPING ARMDETELL IS ADDED IN STORY

WILL DO ONCE I'M FINISHED ANSWERING THESE QUESTIONS.


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WHEN WAS THIS?

 Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ?
16 B


What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character
BASICALLY, ROTOR WASNT PAYING ATTENTION AND 'MISSED' THE GESTURE SONIC MADE TO TIFF BEHIND SALLYS BACK.

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     Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say  wool!


I GUESS I FORGOT TO ADD THAT PART. SORRY.
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WHEN WAS THIS?


SADLY DONT NO TO MUCH TIME PASS

SAME.


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    Also please note I'm not sure if I'm getting all the details right in the right spots. I'm bouncing between a notepad. / the story. And the episode on YouTube


    Pseudo- Sally. ? 



THATS FINE. IM BOUNCING BETWEEN THE STORY AND THIS POST, SO ITS COOL.
WHAT LAND DOES - PSEUDO - COME FROM WHAT IANGUAAGE ?
PSEUDO IS ANOTHER WORD FOR 'FAKE'. ITS ENGLISH.


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  I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally.   I thought that was a nice touch .........

THANKS. I'VE SEEN IT DONE IN OTHER FAN FICTIONS, SO I THOUGHT I WOULD TRY IT MYSELF. GLAD TO SEE IT WORKED.
GLAD TO SEE IT WORKED. IT WORKED , WORKED WELL

I'M GLAD TO SEE IT WORKED TOO. ^-^


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     What is the stuff that she sprays in the ground called you gotta put in the name Of what it is


I DID.

Skidding into a abandoned parking garage, Sally pointed her right finger at the floor and sprayed out a familiar lumpy dark green sludge on the ground. The second she was finished, Sally raced behind a abandoned non functioning heater. Seconds later, Sonic came into the garage in persuit of the robot. "Woah!" Sonic cried as the dark green sludge clung to his red and white sneakers, holding him fast to the ground. grunting, Sonic lifted his shoe as long strings of the lumpy dark green slime clung to his shoes.

"Mega Muck!" Sonic declaired, continuing to struggle in the lumpy dark green goo



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     Also when Sally shooting stuff. Mention the color of your energy beam that is firing

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AGAIN, I DID:


'Sally' pointed her laser finger at a dull gray brick wall as she ran. a blue laser leapt from her finger
and struck the wall, blasting it apart like rubble.

THIS IS AS FAR AS I CAN REALLY UNDERSTAND AT THE MOMENT. ITS HARD TO PIECE TOGETHER THE FULL CONVERSATIONS, AND ITS HARD TO TELL WHICH RESPONSE GOES TO WHICH QUESTION.
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Re: SOMETHING FOR TIFF15
« Reply #5 on: July 14, 2014, 02:11:15 pm »
I hope everything's going okay with you tiff

I read through everything two or three times and I think the best way to do this its just make it into one letter

As for the question about my tablet start with that first

Its a Toshiba Thrive 32 gigabyte at the time of purchase the cost more than $300 and I got it at some point thanks hun. Halfway through the year of 2013 so it's not really that old. /  at the time of purchase I did not have my computer so I wanted to get something to wear I can still talk to my friends on the internet with and the reason I picked the tablet I have. Was because of the physical features that it came with HDMI port. Removable back case you can change the battery. 1 mini USB port another standard size USB port standard memory card port.  I think it has a port for headphones and a port put in a microphone but I'm not sure. /  you see what the features that this comes with Apple products you can't really change the battery so if you had to change the battery on the Apple iPad would have to send it into the company I didn't want to have to do that

Another flaw with my tablet is that when it tries to zoom in on certain websites like Saturday morning Sonic or some other websites it doesn't seem in properly and it goes white screen on me where I can't read anything then of course there are other websites. That don't support the tablet at all to where you can't even zoom in. And with places like that I always type in capital letters can see small print standard text

So I don't really think my tablet is that old maybe a year and a half at the most. I've had it for so long I'm sure the warranty on it is expired and I don't even know if I want to go out and buy another tablet. 

For some reason writing on this notepad app I am doing right now everything is coming out perfectly clear so far

Other time I bought as I wanted to give a Dell tablet but they weren't making them at that time. My computer is not working right now so everything is for my tablet sorry if I'm going a little off topic

Any other questions

Also the one thing I really don't like about the website I made up for all our story writing is whenever something is quoted from Saturday morning Sonic. The message gets posted crazy tiny small.  I have no way to know on how to fix that if I was able to do that or I would that way I could go back and read my own messages and my answering to you would make a lot more sense it would make a lot more sense to me too

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When I answered the messages I did the last time too thanks for going on when I did not have time to go through the messages so I skimmed through what I thought needed to be answered that was the most important so some stuff for skipped over but I didn't know how to answer

You did pretty well considering that the new system I tried to make up you got at least 2 number 13 but I can't go back so if you want to read those and maybe you can understand me better or we can just start up from this point on

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Best Sonic fan game you talked about where can I find that

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Also if you would like to put a more detailed explanation for the Latin root word that would be ok if not maybe I can try to find more information on it on the internet that is if I can find a website that can read


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Ok for Sonic same line in the joking manner so that's okay

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About what you said about the hovercraft when you said I'm glad to hear that settled that makes me laugh I didn't think the name of what it was called was that big of a vehicle name to fight over.  /  makes me laugh




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Ok now in the part when there is that gesture that Sonic does behind Sally and rotor miit. Complete detail about all of that needs to be added outro term I stream it and the complete gesture sequence Sonic and Sally. / that is if there's really anything to add on that part I'm just saying because I haven't gone back to read that you might need to since you are more familiar with it than I am right now

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Ok now about my namesake s perspective and his perspective  of seeing sighing as talking. I guess that makes sense ?

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About the word.  Thank you mentioned PSudo  another word I would have paid for that would have been poser. /  I thought I already added that into my last post but I think you got deleted I'm just expressing creative differences that's all from one writer to another


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About piecing together the conversations I completely understand I'm having the same trouble I thought it was just because of the way my tablet was working but maybe it is because I was reposting sentences over and over again and read things my quotes keep going in small print so I can't even read what I'm saying from the past. 

So I guess that is it I'm not sure how to go from here so you better let me know what the next step is I'll be waiting for your answer then we can work on I'm not plan on to her next time so please let me know.



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Re: SOMETHING FOR TIFF15
« Reply #6 on: January 05, 2015, 03:14:50 pm »
I hope this helps in sorting out who said what.



Tails
I hope everything's going okay with you tiff

Tiff
So far so good. Crazy busy with other projects, but so far so good!

Tails
I read through everything two or three times and I think the best way to do this its just make it into one letter

Tiff
I understand

Tails
As for the question about my tablet start with that first

Its a Toshiba Thrive 32 gigabyte at the time of purchase the cost more than $300 and I got it at some point thanks hun. Halfway through the year of 2013 so it's not really that old. /  at the time of purchase I did not have my computer so I wanted to get something to wear I can still talk to my friends on the internet with and the reason I picked the tablet I have. Was because of the physical features that it came with HDMI port. Removable back case you can change the battery. 1 mini USB port another standard size USB port standard memory card port.  I think it has a port for headphones and a port put in a microphone but I'm not sure. /  you see what the features that this comes with Apple products you can't really change the battery so if you had to change the battery on the Apple iPad would have to send it into the company I didn't want to have to do that

Another flaw with my tablet is that when it tries to zoom in on certain websites like Saturday morning Sonic or some other websites it doesn't seem in properly and it goes white screen on me where I can't read anything then of course there are other websites. That don't support the tablet at all to where you can't even zoom in. And with places like that I always type in capital letters can see small print standard text

So I don't really think my tablet is that old maybe a year and a half at the most. I've had it for so long I'm sure the warranty on it is expired and I don't even know if I want to go out and buy another tablet. 

For some reason writing on this notepad app I am doing right now everything is coming out perfectly clear so far

Other time I bought as I wanted to give a Dell tablet but they weren't making them at that time. My computer is not working right now so everything is for my tablet sorry if I'm going a little off topic

Any other questions

Tiff
Not right now, no. and that does explain a lot about the tablet, issue. Thanks.

Tails
Also the one thing I really don't like about the website I made up for all our story writing is whenever something is quoted from Saturday morning Sonic. The message gets posted crazy tiny small.  I have no way to know on how to fix that if I was able to do that or I would that way I could go back and read my own messages and my answering to you would make a lot more sense it would make a lot more sense to me too

Tiff
Yeah, I just saw it myself. Does this work better?

Tails
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When I answered the messages I did the last time too thanks for going on when I did not have time to go through the messages so I skimmed through what I thought needed to be answered that was the most important so some stuff for skipped over but I didn't know how to answer

You did pretty well considering that the new system I tried to make up you got at least 2 number 13 but I can't go back so if you want to read those and maybe you can understand me better or we can just start up from this point on

Tiff
I think we should just start up from this point on. That way theres not so much confusion on ethier end.

Tails
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Best Sonic fan game you talked about where can I find that

Tiff
I think your best bet would be to just google 'Sonic Epoch' and look through the sites. I'm not sure what site has it. Sorry.

Tails
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Also if you would like to put a more detailed explanation for the Latin root word that would be ok if not maybe I can try to find more information on it on the internet that is if I can find a website that can read

Tiff
Hooo boy. No offense, Tails, but talk about a tall order! Once again, I suggest trying google.com .  Which word are you looking up again?

Tails
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Ok for Sonic same line in the joking manner so that's okay

Tiff

Alright. glad that settled then.

Tails
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About what you said about the hovercraft when you said I'm glad to hear that settled that makes me laugh I didn't think the name of what it was called was that big of a vehicle name to fight over.  /  makes me laugh

Tiff
I'm glad I made you laugh. :)

Tails
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Ok now in the part when there is that gesture that Sonic does behind Sally and rotor miit. Complete detail about all of that needs to be added outro term I stream it and the complete gesture sequence Sonic and Sally. / that is if there's really anything to add on that part I'm just saying because I haven't gone back to read that you might need to since you are more familiar with it than I am right now

Tiff

You mean the gesture where Sonic points his index and middle finger to his eyes, then swivles his wrist around, lowers his middle finger, and points to Sally with his index finger? That gesture simply means 'watch Sally'. Sorry if I confused you.

Tails
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Ok now about my namesake s perspective and his perspective  of seeing sighing as talking. I guess that makes sense ?

Tiff
Yeah, its one of those pesky little plot holes the original writers never did clear up. I guess it would sound less urgent if Tails said "And then she went outside and sighed to herself, and her eyes turned all red and yucky!". On the other hand, Tails was pretty freaked out by the fake Sally. maybe he made a mistake?

Tails
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About the word.  Thank you mentioned PSudo  another word I would have paid for that would have been poser. /  I thought I already added that into my last post but I think you got deleted I'm just expressing creative differences that's all from one writer to another

Tiffany
Okay. I can respect that.

Tails
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About piecing together the conversations, I completely understand I'm having the same trouble. I thought it was just because of the way my tablet was working. but, maybe it is because I was reposting sentences over and over again and read things my quotes keep going in small print. so I can't even read what I'm saying from the past. 

So I guess that is it I'm not sure how to go from here so you better let me know what the next step is I'll be waiting for your answer then we can work on I'm not plan on to her next time so please let me know.

Tiffany
I think the best thing to do would be to just let it be. I do need your help in clearing up anything that might be confusing in Book 4. So if we could get started on that, that would be great.

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