SORRY ABOUT WAITING SO LONG TO REPLY, TAILS. LIFE HAS BEEN CRAZILY HECTIC LATELY. I'LL DO MY BEST TO REPLY AS CLEARLY AS I CAN.
Chapter 4
part 2
Now in the part when she is with rotor exploring her acting ability
And you say spent most of the afternoon with him what day is that supposed to be tomorrow what is that supposed to be yesterday what is it supposed to be a flashback memory you need to put a timing that's on there like what day and what time is happening. Because this part is very confusing.
'ACTING'? YOU MEAN 'HACKING' DONT YOU? ANYWAYS, SORRY FOR CONFUSING YOU. ITS LATE IN THE AFTERNOON, AROUND 3:30 TO 6:00.
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Why is rotors name. In a sentence when you're talking about the keyboard and eyes glowing. The second time his name is mentioned I understand why but the first time
OKAY, I SEE THE SENTENCE IN QUESTION
'tristina frowned, then looked at Rotor wearily as Rotor pushed his muzzle further down his tusks.'
SORRY ABOUT THAT. I DIDNT EVEN NOTICE ROTOR'S NAME WAS MENTIONED TWICE. HOW ABOUT I CHANGE THE SECOND 'ROTOR' TO 'THE WALRUS' OR 'HE'?
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Where did they get the Spy orb. / I don't remember reading about them picking one up in Robotropolis earlier
I THOUGHT I EXPLAINED THAT. SORRY. ROTOR HAD A DISABLED SPY ORB LYING AROUND AND DECIDED TO USE IT TO TEST TRISTINA'S HACKING ABILITY.
Okay now there is a big button on the keypad. Are you sure you want it to be that. What about a picture of a UFO instead. And where do I put this button
ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT THIS LINE?
'"Okay bolt bottoms," Tristina snarled, glancing briefly to her right wheelchair arm. "THIS is where we part company!" Tristina cried, jamming all of her fingers on a button with a ring etched into it. a whitish golden glow engulfed the hedgehog as a burst of power exploded from the back of her wheelchair. Tristina then whooped as she left the robots in the dust.'
THATS THE TURBO BOOST BUTTON. I THINK WE ALREADY HAVE A DRAWING OF THAT.
Also the problem you're talking about her being on a mission when she presses. How to be a flashback memory or you have to wwill do it. Somewhere earlier in the story
I'M AFRAID I DONT UNDERSTAND WHAT YOUR ASKING. WHAT FLASHBACK?
Where is the part when Sally 9000 reads. a bedtime story to tell
ITS NEAR THE END. I FORGOT TO PUT IT IN, SO I HAD SALLY HAVE A 'FLASHBACK' TO WHEN SHE HEARD THE ROBOT SALLY 'READING' TO TAILS
What's lapine ?
LAPINE IS ANOTHER WORD FOR RABBIT.
You ever noticed in the show you never see her talk to herself
It's never there I wonder if it was cut when they were making episode
If she's going to be talking to herself to you have to have some scenery or set for circumstances where he see this happening
I THINK THATS THE SCENE WHERE TAILS SEE'S SALLY SIGH, THEN SCAN THE HUTS. I KNOW A SIGH ISNT THE SAME AS TALKING, BUT IT SEEMS IN CHARACTER TO ME.
Also sonic doesn't chuckle. back at tails. In the episode did you add this part? For affect. Or are you reading of a special script. That didn't make it to production
WHERE EXACTLY DID YOU READ THIS PART.
That's the end of chapter 5 part 1
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Next chapter 5 part 2
How can sonic grab her wheelchair wheels.
SONIC DIDNT. TRISTINA GRABBED HER OWN WHEELCHAIR WHEELS.
If someone did that to me I couldn't drive my chair
T2 thats funny. Just think of tails of as the Fox terminator
HEH. I'M GOING TO HAVE TO MAKE A DRAWING OF THAT SOME TIME. SORT OF LIKE THE TAILS DOLL? EWW, THAT WOULD BE CREEPY.
Should the really be bad words in the writing of sat am sonic story
It just doesn't seem right. me after all this is not South Park
I know people say that stuff in real life. But don't you wish they didn't
I'm just saying
I DONT RECALL WRITING ANY CURSING. WHERE DID YOU READ THIS?
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Chapter 5 part 3
What does is mean. / *****ily
AH YES. FOUND AND CHANGED TO 'JOKINGLY'
Are hover units supposed to be the things that the swat boys fly in. ?
YES. THEY ARE ALSO KNOWN AS 'HOVER CRAFTS' IN THE SERIES.
In the part about the hooks hidden Hover unit. I'm not sure if what you wrote matches up to what I saw on screen how it was destroyed
IS THIS THE SCENE YOU WERE TALKING ABOUT?
'the four grappling hooks then sank onto the lower part of the hovercraft and split it horizontally. the bottom half crashed into the the concrete ground while the upper half arched like a arrow into a nearby building.'
Yes I do need to see the episodes as I'm going through this. To understand the setting more
When rotor says we got to move it And he waved his arm Please mention which arm and how he moves it
HE MOVES HIS ARM AS IF HE'S THROWING A BASEBALL.
What do you mean rotor miss the exchange Between Sonic and Sally and your character
WHEN WAS THIS?
Are you talking about the looks they gave each other ?
Also win Sonic and rotor. Duck down the window. Just as that hovercraft is coming by. Where is the part they say wool!
I GUESS I FORGOT TO ADD THAT PART. SORRY.
Also please note I'm not sure if I'm getting all the details right in the right spots. I'm bouncing between a notepad. / the story. And the episode on YouTube
Pseudo- Sally. ?
THATS FINE. IM BOUNCING BETWEEN THE STORY AND THIS POST, SO ITS COOL.
PSEUDO IS ANOTHER WORD FOR 'FAKE'.
I like the part when you split up sonic speech between the two characters. What he says in the show tells was right You're not sally. I thought that was a nice touch .........
THANKS. I'VE SEEN IT DONE IN OTHER FAN FICTIONS, SO I THOUGHT I WOULD TRY IT MYSELF. GLAD TO SEE IT WORKED.
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Chapter 6 part 1
What is the stuff that she sprays in the ground called you gotta put in the name Of what it is
I DID.
Skidding into a abandoned parking garage, Sally pointed her right finger at the floor and sprayed out a familiar lumpy dark green sludge on the ground. The second she was finished, Sally raced behind a abandoned non functioning heater. Seconds later, Sonic came into the garage in persuit of the robot. "Woah!" Sonic cried as the dark green sludge clung to his red and white sneakers, holding him fast to the ground. grunting, Sonic lifted his shoe as long strings of the lumpy dark green slime clung to his shoes.
"Mega Muck!" Sonic declaired, continuing to struggle in the lumpy dark green goo Also when Sally shooting stuff. Mention the color of your energy beam that is firing
AGAIN, I DID:
'Sally' pointed her laser finger at a dull gray brick wall as she ran. a
blue laser leapt from her finger
and struck the wall, blasting it apart like rubble.
We should have as much as visual information to The reader as possible
Bunny doesn't look beige to me. More of a coffee brown Or mocha brown. Whichever way you want to say it
TOO. MANY. VARIATIONS. OF BROWN. HEH, JUST KIDDING. I UNDERSTAND.
Did you notice that when the energy beam from Power ring shootout In the show. There's no visual indication whatsoever. Of where the energy blast gos. That detail needs to be fixed
Because in the cartoon it just disappears like it never happened
I THOUGHT I DID FIX THAT.
'Sally fired her laser finger at him again, but Sonic merely pulled out his power ring. leveling it infront of him, Sonic beared his teeth as the power ring glowed.
Finally,
the ring sent out a beam of yellow energy that barely missed Sally. Also infused with energy from the power ring, Sonic surged forward and began to run circles around the robot.'
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Now at this point when you're talking about real Sally Being restrained
Above that before you start reading this It should read.
Meanwhile back at robotics. Lab / Or command center / hIs base of operations
And the robot making lab
It also should be mentioned that Sally. Turned her left eye. Towards Dr nicks. Screen. It looks like it's almost right behind her
I REALLY DONT SEE A PLACE TO MENTION THIS. I'LL KEEP WORKING ON IT THOUGH.
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Chapter 6 part 2
Where is tiffs / your hard drive ?
I'm sorry it's just easier this way
TIFF WAS TALKING ABOUT THE ROBOT SALLY'S HARD DRIVE, NOT HER OWN. TIFF DOESNT HAVE A HARD DRIVE.
Here I'm thinking project Sally. Is happening right now with robotic turning her into a robot
Or is it something else?
'PROJECT SALLY' IS ROBOTNIKS PLAN TO SWITCH SALLY WITH THE FAKE AND USE THE FAKE SALLY TO REVEAL KNOTHOLE.
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Chapter 6 part 3
A sonic tugged. on a medal round great
And mention something about the size of the two.
MAYBE LATER. REALLY TIRED AT THE MOMENT, SORRY.
Some of the senses are misspelled and mispronounced. Because of my tablet.
So. I hope you understand what I mean
'SENSES'? YOU MEAN SENTENCES?
Any questions let me know
NOT A PROBLEM.
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What is all this talk about smoke coming from a disconnected pipe. ?
What's important about that pipe. ?
THE DISCONNECTED PIPE IS ETHIER AN EXAUST PIPE OR SOMETHING THAT HOLDS STEAM.
Garage like door I don't remember that in the episode
THE SCENE WHERE SONIC AND SALLY EXIT ROBOTNIKS HEADQUARTERS. THE DOOR LOOKS LIKE A GARAGE DOOR.
OKAY, IM GOING TO HAVE TO LEAVE OFF HERE FOR TONIGHT. I'M TOO TIRED TO CONTINUE. I'LL TRY TO ANSWER MORE QUESTIONS TOMORROW.